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08 July 2006 @ 09:12 pm
Fic: Like Candy From A Baby  
Title: Like Candy From A Baby
Author: scoradh
Pairing: Harry/Ron
Rating: R
Wordcount: c. 13,000
Summary: Ron seduces Harry. Post HBP. Request by legomymalfoy on slashfest.
Beta: terkey [♥!]

Ron perched on a bar stool, feeling uncomfortably homosexual in a such a blatantly vagina-celebrating environment.
 
 
Current Location: here, yo
Current Mood: weirdweird
Current Music: April Fools (Rufus Wainwright)
 
 
 
empathic_siren on July 15th, 2006 10:58 pm (UTC)
After an exhausting week of dealing with crazy clients and flitting all around the country for stupid work things, what a JOY it was to come home and read your fic this afternoon. I must admit that I was not familiar with your work prior to our lovely exchange a week or so ago, but am glad to have found you.

What I love about this story is the way you keep the characters in character while they do things they would likely never do "for real." (no comments about the "realism" of fiction). While the idea of Ron as a blatant homosexual stereotype is fanciful, his very real desire to make his brothers acknowledge him, to "shine," and to love Harry are not. Those are such basic components of "Ron." I love how you kept the core of what drives him, but turned the fiction of "Ron, Wizard boy about town" on its head. Bravo. The same is true with Harry. Still outwardly oblivious, but--really--quite devious and all too self-aware. The thing about Harry is that, for the most part, he lacks the ability to express or acknowledge what it is he wants and why he should have it. I love that this was still very much a part of his character. Perhaps my favorite thing, though, was the structure of this fic. Your humor and breezy style were effortless. The humor was woven so finely that it wasn't the fic--it supported the story. Does that make sense?? Also, your language was lyrical where needed, and snappy, almost brittle, where needed. Fantastic job. Can't wait to read more of your work.

(Oh yes, and by the way, was blushing like mad with your very lovely rec. I don't think I've ever been rec'ed before like that. Thank you.)
every Starbucks should have a polar bear: Dracoscoradh on July 15th, 2006 11:44 pm (UTC)
I'm glad it brought some easy pleasure into your life -- that's what I define as success in this arena. ♥

I must admit that any IC-ness is down to pure luck; I imagine the characters in a certain setting and let them wander off from there. I learned early on not to 'push' certain events on to them, so maybe that's it? I dno.

As for the humour, I can't help challenging any metaphor or simile I come across. I can be even worse than this at times; I remember trying to make every sentence funny. Boy, was that exhausting.

Anyway, what I guess I'm trying to say is that my style isn't something I have any control over, so I'm blessed that people seem to like it on occasion. Thank you for your great comment; seeing people so drawn into the story is the best kind of high there is.

You have checked lazy_daze's rec, too, haven't you? And that was only the tip of the iceberg -- I could have gone on and on about how great I think Draco's Boy is, but I'd probably be arrested. 8D

empathic_siren on July 16th, 2006 12:03 am (UTC)
Uh, no . . . hadn't seen lazy_daze's rec (have now read). I must say, it's quite scary that so many people that I hold in very high regard are reading this story. I sort of thought I was flying a bit under the radar--mostly because I pretty much fly under the radar all of the time. Good lord, I hope I can live up to everyone's expectations. Now I feel the need for a second beta on the british side of things. *gulp* (me, nervous? ha ha . . . where would anyone get a thought like that??)

With regard to YOUR fic (because I do realize it's not all about me) I really like what you said about letting the characters wander off. That is inherent in the "naturalness" of your writing, I suppose. Nothing feels forced. It's like, "well, of course Ron's wearing smokey black eyeliner," you know? I love that. (warning--rambling ahead). I really like fics that are constructed in such a way that they have a slightly stylized feel, but don't feel like they're stylized. Sort of form/function analysis. It's a difficult balance, and I think you do with great aplumb and charm.

I also really like what you said about metaphors and similies, etc. In the same vein as the above, I really respond to clever writing and you seem to have that ability in spades. I've written two things that I thought were funny and clever--in the sense that I purposefully wrote them to be humorous--and, ironically, they're my two favorite fics that I've written. (and I say ironic, because I don't consider myself a particularly humorous writer) Sweet, breezy little H/D one-shots that I just had a ball writing. Anyway, I could write things to you all night, it seems. Would love to chat with you some time about writing in general, if you're ever interested.
every Starbucks should have a polar bear: Harry/Draco pinkscoradh on July 16th, 2006 12:18 am (UTC)
As regards Brit-picking, I'm available. Although as I'm Irish I'm not technically British, but I do know sneakers from trainers, type thing.

I think you've hit what I'd call a good vein, in the sense that you've picked something that appeals to a lot of people and written it charmingly and well. You haven't put Harry and Draco in an AU situation just so you can fluffily ship them without worrying about Death Eaters and Voldemort and years of residual hate. You've actually given them believable, real-life issues as well. When I finished your last chapter, it wasn't obvious what was going to happen. So many things could go wrong, so many unforseen obstacles could crop up -- just like in real life. I hope you realise how rare that is. I can usually see how things pan out quite early on, especially given that most writers don't even try to be subtle about it, and I'm not alone in that.

I do have rather the penchant for boys in eyeliner, it has to be said. Probably if I'd set out to put Ron in eyeliner it wouldn't have read as well. Who knows? That's why I'm amazed and impressed by people who actually plot things out before they start writing. I'm lucky to have a starting sentance; usually I get a colour in my head. I know that sounds daft, and it is, but it's all my muses give me to get on with.

I'd be delighted to chat about writing. So few people are genuinely interested in the mechanics of it -- it's a bit too much like seeing the man behind the curtain when all they want is the illusion. You also seem to know tonnes about writing -- that form/function comment? All I've got to go on is high school English designed for people who never read books, and a lifetime of reading that alerts me to poor grammar without knowing what the actual grammar is.

As far as lite-fic goes, I suppose when you let it flow it's just that much more powerful. I remember reading in 'The Art of Discworld' that Terry Pratchett thinks most of his writing is done by that 'far better writer who lives inside my head' and happens when he opens the channel to it -- I often feel like that too. Especially as I get my best ideas just before falling asleep or after waking up (which is never the best time to be scrabbling around for a pen and paper, given the inherent poor co-ordination).

I think I've rambled totally OT, but I'm blaming the lateness of the hour, the vast quantities of sugar I've imbibed and your thought-provoking comments. :D
empathic_siren on July 16th, 2006 12:40 am (UTC)
I hope you don't mind the response, given the late hour, but so much of what you say resonates with me that I find myself anxious to type!

As regards Brit-picking, I'm available. Although as I'm Irish I'm not technically British, but I do know sneakers from trainers, type thing.

I'll take you up on that, if that's all right. I've got people helping me with the horse stuff (I can fake the botany, but not the horses). It's funny, because I actually try very hard to avoid blatant "Americanisms." For example, I spent an entire afternoon trying to figure out the British education system--it was very, er, perplexing and I don't think I got it right at the end of the day. So any assistance would be much appreciated.

I do have rather the penchant for boys in eyeliner

(me too *evil grin*)

You also seem to know tonnes about writing -- that form/function comment? All I've got to go on is high school English designed for people who never read books, and a lifetime of reading that alerts me to poor grammar without knowing what the actual grammar is.

Actually, my experience is very similar to yours. I read voraciously and write more intuitively than anything else. It's only been in the last eight months that I've made myself learn some of the more arcane grammar rules. I don't want things like that to distract, you know? That's something I can fix and learn, and so I'm trying. As for the form/function comment, that's really more of comment from my music background. I have a degree in music composition, and we study and deconstruct manuscripts in much the same way that I imagine English Literature majors deconstruct novels. My knowledge about writing has been gleaned from those patient enough to teach me, my own struggles with grammar texts, etc., and the "trial by fire" method of writing. I am fascinated by the process of writing, because I do believe you have to a mastery of the tool before you can use it to create beauty. Let's make a play date! : )

God. I'm rambling again. Sorry. : )
every Starbucks should have a polar bear: Eggsscoradh on July 16th, 2006 01:12 am (UTC)
Grand so! My email's scoradh@gmail -- I mean, I have multiple ones, but I use that when I need to transfer and hold big files.

The English public school system is largely a mystery to most people, but I know some people in it. Nothing in your rendition struck me as terribly out of place, so you're doing okay; never fear!

One of my friends knows a lot about grammar from doing Latin and Greek at uni level; it was she who introduced me to the genitive clause. It's something that makes me wince every time I see it done incorrectly, but I never knew what it was until last summer. That's where betas come in so handy; mine taught me about the proper use of adverbs, semi-colons, dashes and ellipses, among other things. Fandom can be an excellent learning curve if used properly.

No, please continue. We ramblers must stick together!

I also love the word 'play-date'. Because writing should always be this fun. ♥